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The table shows the cost of water in 5 cities in Australia. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features.

The table shows the cost of water in 5 cities in Australia. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features.
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The table depicts the
price
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for
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of
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 water in five different cities in Australia - Adelaide, Brisbane,
Melbourne
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,
Perth
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 and Sydney.
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, the highest
price
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 is in Sydney and in 3 out of 5 cities, the
price
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 is different between 2 levels of usage (under 125
kiloliter
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kiloliters
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 and over 125
kiloliter
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) with the biggest difference in
Perth
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.
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, the average bill per household is highest in
Perth
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 and lowest in
Melbourne
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. The highest charge for water is Sydney with
the
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price
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 of $0.98 which
applied
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 for both 2 levels of usage. Applying the same
price
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 for different volumes of water used is
also
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practiced
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 in
Melbourne
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 at the
price
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 of $0.78. For
Perth
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 and Adelaide, the differences are much more significant at almost 3 and 2.5 times between $0.42 and $1.50 and $0.42 and $1.00 respectively. The average
price
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 per household is relatively even between the cities at around $310.
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, households in
Melbourne
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 pay the lowest charge at $253 and families in
Perth
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 have the highest charge at $332.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words price, melbourne, perth with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "difference" was used 2 times.
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