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Task 1: (Process) The process below shows the process of growing and making products from pineapple. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features.

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Contained in the diagrams is information pertaining to the mature process of pineapple
as well as
 its products. Generally speaking, with sustainable conditions, the
pineapples
 are able to grow up until being harvested.
Additionally
, after being washed,
pineapples
 are sorted by size for different purposes.
To begin
 with, pineapple crowns are ideally positioned at a distance of 26
centimeters
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 separate from each other under the condition of
temperature
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the temperature
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 range of 23 to 30 degrees Celsius. After a 7-month period, these
pineapples
 are sprayed with chemicals known as ethylene. Gradually, these continue to grow in the next five months until they reach the size of 30
centimeters
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 and weigh 2 kilograms in standard.
As a result
 of
this
, the ripened
pineapples
 are harvested and ready for the
producing
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 stages. The procedure of production commences when harvested
pineapples
 are washed
by
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 water. Turning to the next stage where these
pineapples
 are sorted into three types. With the small and medium ones, they are chopped and
then
 peeled for the next steps. The prepared small
pineapples
 are
then
 extracted to make juice
while
 the bigger ones are cut into slices and canned ready for consumption. Regarding the biggest
pineapples
, they are sprayed with wax to preserve and put in large containers to sell for domestic
as well as
 import around the world.
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introduction conclusion
Your introduction is clear and provides a good overview of the process. However, you could improve it by making it a bit more concise.
logical structure
Ensure each stage of the process flows smoothly. In some parts, there is a slight jump in the sequence that may confuse readers.
complete response
You have covered all stages of the process in detail, which shows a thorough understanding of the task.
relevant specific examples
Your use of specific details, like temperatures and distance, adds valuable precision to your essay.

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