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The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts showed how it was distributed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts showed how it was distributed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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provides
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provide
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 information about
comparison
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a comparison
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 of
police
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the police
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budget
's sources and
portion
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a portion
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 of
police's
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police
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budget
 spending between 2017 - 2018 in one region of Britain. In
summarize
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summary
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, there
is
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was
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increase
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an increase
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of
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in
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police
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the police
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budget
 and changes
of
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in
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spending
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the spending
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portion
 in 2018. Based on the table information,
police
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the police
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budget
rise
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rose
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 from
GBP
 304,7
Million
into
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to
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GBP
 318,6
Million
 in 2018,
contributed
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contributing
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from
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to
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 the surge of every
sources
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source
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. The National Government, which has
biggest
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the biggest
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portion
,
increase
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increased
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 their contribution from
GBP
 175,5
Milion
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million
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into
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to
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 177,8
Milion
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Million
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 followed by funds from Local Taxes that
hike
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increased
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 from
GBP
 91,2
Million
 to
GBP
 102,3
Million
 and other sources
financing
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of financing
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,
such
 as grants, slightly
increase
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increased
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 from
GBP
 38
Million
 to
GBP
 38,5
Million
.
Then
,
spending
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the spending
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propotion
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proportion
promotion
 of
police
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the police
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budget
also
 changed in 2018. Wages expense remains
take
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apply
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the dominant
portion
, but the spending
was fell
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fell
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 from 75% of
total
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the total
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budget
on
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in
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 2017
into
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to
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 69%
on
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in
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 2018.
On the other hand
, technology spending was
increase
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increased
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 from 8% of
total
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the total
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budget
into
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to
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 14% of
total
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the total
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budget
on
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in
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 2018.
Accomodation
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Accommodation
 expense,
that
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which
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 consists of buildings and transport, remains stable
on
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at
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 17% of
total
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the total
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budget
.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words police, budget, portion, increase, gbp, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remains" was used 2 times.
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