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in the future all cars, buses, and trucks will be driverless. The only people travelling inside these vehicles will be passengers. Do you think the advantages of driverless vehicles outweigh the disadvantages.

#future #cars #buses #trucks #driverless #people #vehicles #passengers
For the next years, all
of
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four
tires
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 vehicles will be
drive
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 by
autopilot
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an autopilot
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system
 and many
people
 could use the
cars
 without driving
it
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them
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.
This
 future
technology
 will benefit
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to
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people
such
as
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an
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an easier
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easier
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an easier
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 driving experience and
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cutting
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the
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cost
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 for the driver. In my opinion, there are more disadvantages than
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the
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advantages because
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they
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it
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have
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high
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a high
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 risk
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for
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 auto
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accidents
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accident
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accidents
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 and less
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of
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responsibility for the
passengers
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themselves
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itself
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themselves
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.
Firstly
,
this
automation
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 vehicle related to
technology
 will bring benefit to
people
that
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who
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 do not have
ability
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the ability
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 to
drive
 or
not
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are not
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 in
the
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 fit health condition. So for
this
 kind of
people
, it will
makes
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easier
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it easier
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to
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 them to
drive
the
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cars
 without real
drive
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driving
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 experience.
For example
, if
people
in
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are in
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the
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sick and sleepy
condition
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conditions
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,
they
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cars
 might be able to
drive
it self
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itself
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 without
controlling
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 and they can take
a
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rest in the car without driving the
cars
.
Consequently
,
this
also
lead
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 to
reduce
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 the need for the driver and cutting the cost for the driver itself.
However
, how far the
automation
 driving
technology
 can protect the
passengers
? Aside from the benefits,
i
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 think
this
autopilot
technology
 will have
high
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a high
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 risk
for
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 auto
accident
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accidents
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 because thave a big chance
to
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 sudden
error
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errors
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 related to the
system
. The
error
 will be hard to
avoided
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 because the
automation
not
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does not
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 give the
passengers
 to control or avoid it. If it comes to
the
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transportation,
accident
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accidents
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 sometimes happen
for
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sudden
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.
For example
, sometimes
sudden
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 hit from
another
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another car
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cars
 will happen, if the
system
 cannot detect
this
, it will
leads
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 to
sudden
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a sudden
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error
 that
harming
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harms
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 the
passengers
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passenger's
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 life. Another
disadvantages
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 is the lack of the
passengers
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passenger's
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 responsibility to operate the
cars
.
As a result
, if the
error
 comes from the
autopilot
system
 like a sudden stop, that will
make
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 traffic or
accident
 in
the
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 unpredicted way. Obviously, the
passengers
 will have an argument that they not operate the
cars
, it is all
because
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autopilot
 machine. But,
how
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 if the accidents make the victims? who is to blame? because
the
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automation
system
, we can not blame the
passengers
.
To conclude
,
autopilot related
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 vehicles will bring benefits to
people
, but somehow the disadvantages will lead to risking other
people
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people's
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 lives and harming others.
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task achievement
Your essay covers the main points of the task, but ensure you maintain focus on the question to improve clarity. The contrive needs to be cohesively developed throughout the essay.
coherence cohesion
While your essay is organized with a clear introduction and conclusion, work on ensuring your logical flow is more fluid. Use transition words and phrases more effectively.
task achievement
Some examples used are relevant, but they could be more detailed and specific to better support your arguments. Try to expand and elaborate on the examples given.
coherence cohesion
The essay structure, with a clear introduction and conclusion, is commendable.
task achievement
You have addressed both advantages and disadvantages, showing a balanced perspective.

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  • driverless vehicles
  • advantages
  • disadvantages
  • increased safety
  • reduced traffic congestion
  • improved efficiency
  • accessibility
  • disabled
  • elderly
  • job displacement
  • privacy concerns
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