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The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts showed how it was distributed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts showed how it was distributed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table and pie charts provide information on the
police
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budget
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 for 2017 and 2018 in Britain. The table describes the sources of the
budget
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,
while
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 the table charts illustrate how it was allocated.
Overall
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, in both years, salaries accounted for the largest proportion of the
budget
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. Spending on buildings and transport remained constant,
while
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 the allocation for technology increased.
Additionally
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, the
overall
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police
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budget
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 saw an increase in 2018.
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 to the data in more detail, the largest source of the
police
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budget
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 in both years was the National Government, with a figure of £175.5
million
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 in 2017, increasing to £177.8
million
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 in 2018. Local taxes followed the second-largest source, providing £91.2
million
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 in 2017 and £102.3
million
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 in 2018. Other sources contributed £38
million
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 in 2017, slightly increasing to £38.5
million
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 in 2018.
As a result
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, the total
police
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budget
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 grew from £304.7
million
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 in 2017 to £318.6
million
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 in 2018. Regarding expenditure, in 2017, salaries accounted
one-fourth
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for one-fourth
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 of the
budget
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,
while
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 buildings
and
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apply
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transport, and technology received 17% and 8% respectively.
In contrast
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, in 2018, the proportion of the
budget
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 spent on salaries decreased to 69%,
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 the allocation for technology increased to 14%. Interestingly, spending on buildings and transport remained unchanged at 17% in 2018.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall, while".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words police, budget, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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