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The table and chart provide a breakdown of the total expenditure and the average amount of money spent by students per week while studying abroad in four countries.

The table and chart provide a breakdown of the total expenditure and the average amount of money spent by students per week while studying abroad in four countries.
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The table and chart provide a breakdown of the total expenditure and the average amount of money spent by students per week
while
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 studying abroad in four countries. Contained in the illustration are a chart and table pertaining to a breakdown of the total expense and the median quantity of money which is spent weekly by overseas students in four nations.
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, students in
country
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 A spent most of the money compared to other countries.
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,
country
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 A
also
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 had the biggest difference between each category. Beginning with the total expense,
country
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 A spent the highest at 875 dollars, followed by B and C which were 735 and 540 respectively.
Country
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 D spent the least with only 435 dollars. Looking into each category, A, B,and Chad
the
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 same proportion for accommodation, tuition and living costs which were 220, 358, 430 for A; 280,320 and 350 for B; 240, 250 and 275 for C in that order.
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, D was an exception with the respective figures for accommodation, tuition and living costs being 200, 235 and 225.

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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 94%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words country with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "provide" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "amount" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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