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The charts below show the main reasons for migration to/from UK in 2007.

The charts below show the main reasons for migration to/from UK in 2007.
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The two pie charts demonstrate statistical information about the proportion
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in
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people
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 leaving or moving to
British
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 for six distinct reasons in the year 2007.
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, it is noticeable that the largest amount of
people
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 migrated to and from the
UK
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 to settle in fixed jobs. Meanwhile, the smallest percentage of
people
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 moved
in
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British
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 without any specific
purposes
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 and
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 proportion of
people
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 emigrated to other countries
for studying
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to study
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. Looking at the pie chart
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 detail, nearly a third of the total percentiles
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immigrated to and emigrated from
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 for a decided job, accounting for 30% and 29%, respectively. The figure
of
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people
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 who moved
in
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 the
UK
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for studying
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 showed a marginal gap in percentage with those who immigrated for a certain job, twice as much as those who migrated to the
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 to find
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. The reverse trend was observed in the statistics of emigrants For other reasons,
people
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 who left
British
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 without any purpose made up almost a fifth of the total, three times that of those
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 without reason, exhibiting an insignificant 6% figure. On top of that, 15% and 11% of immigrants moved for cooperation and other purposes and
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 percentage of
people
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also
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 left the
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 for the aforementioned reasons.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, british, uk with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "moved" was used 4 times.
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