You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The graphs below show the enrolments of overseas students and local students in Australian universities over a ten year period. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The graphs below show the enrolments of overseas students and local students in 

Australian universities over a ten year period.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make 

comparisons where relevant.

You should write at least 150 words
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The given line graph is a figure revealing data about the amount of abroad
students
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and native
students
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in universities in Australia over 10
years
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.
Overall
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, the line shows that in the beginning, the amount of commencing overseas
students
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and local
students
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was the lowest and over the
years
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increased.
While
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the amount of total local
students
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was more than the total overseas
students
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, in the beginning. as the graph shows, the commencing of local
students
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was under 20000 in 2001 and it had a slight increase to just over 20000, in 2002.
while
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the same trend in abroad
students
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gradually increased until 2008, in 40000.
Similarly
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, the trend of total overseas
students
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and local
students
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experienced a significant rise during 10
years
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and reached 80000 and 600000, respectively.
However
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, the total number of native
students
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were
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witnessed a higher figure, between 20001 and 2010, and was exactly 6 times more.
Although
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it was stable for 4
years
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, from 2006 until 2010.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words students, years with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • enrolments
  • trend
  • peak
  • trough
  • comparative analysis
  • surpassed
  • dominant
  • fluctuations
  • stability
  • growth
  • decline
  • significant
  • notable
  • shift
  • influence
  • predict
  • impact
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