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The graph below shows relative price changes for fresh fruits and vegetables, sugars and sweets, and carbonated drinks between 1978 and 2009. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and making comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The graph below shows relative price changes for fresh fruits and vegetables, sugars and sweets, and carbonated drinks between 1978 and 2009. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and making comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The given line graph illustrates changing
price
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prices
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 for 4 different
categories
 within a
period
 of 31 years, commencing from 1978.
Overall
, The highest rate of changing price can be observed for fresh fruits and
vegetables
 in 2008 and the opposite can be seen for
Cabonated
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Carbonated
 drinks.
moreover
, all of the
categories
 had an upward tendency during the
period
. At the beginning of the
period
, the same amount can be seen for all
categories
, which was recorded at just over 50. fresh fruits and
vegetables
 increased sharply to get to around 325 at in of the
period
 and
this
 group was
a
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apply
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significantely
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significantly
 greater than that of sugar and sweets. other
categories
keep
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kept
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 the same trend and
exceded
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exceeded
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 fresh fruit and
vegetables
in1984
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in 1984
 by 100
then
 sugars and sweets moderately increased within 22 years to finish around 200. carbonated drinks
Verb problem
apply
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was experience
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was experienced
was experiencing
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 move upward trend to finish
just
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at just
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 over 150. during the
period
 fresh fruits and
vegetables
experinced
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experienced
 more
cganging
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changing
price
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prices
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 than the other
categories
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words categories, period, vegetables with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "just over" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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