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Your friend is coming to your country from abroad, but you can't go to pick him up at the airport. Write a letter to him/her and say -why you can't pick him up -suggest alternative ideas -talk about what he can do in your country

#friend #country #airport #-why #-suggest #alternative #-talk
Dear John, I hope you're doing great, I saw your
last
 message saying that you are
coming
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 KSA soon,
as
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and
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 I'm very glad to hear that.
Unforuntately
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Unfortunately
, I
can'nt
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can't
 pick you
from
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up from
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 the airport
during
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on
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 that day. I discovered that I have a dentist appointment that I have been waiting for so long. It's at 5p.m exactly the time when you arrived. .
Also
, when I tried to
rearranage
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rearrange
 it, I was unable because there
is
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 no
avaliable
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available
 ones. I think taking Uber would be
perfect
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the perfect
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 idea for you, as it has a lower cost in my country. I
also
suggests
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 that you request a ride very
ealy
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early
 so you can catch it easily. Of
course
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course,
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 you're invited to my home as
soos
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soon
 as you
arrived
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arrive
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, we can have
the
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dinner together, and I will cook for you the meal you like. As well,watching a movie at
the
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night would be nice. see you soon, Nouf Best wishes,
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coherence cohesion
The logical structure could be improved by organizing the content more effectively. Ensure each paragraph discusses one main idea.
coherence cohesion
Work on avoiding typographical errors and improving spelling and grammar to enhance clarity.
coherence cohesion
Ensure each paragraph has a clear, single idea. For example, discuss why you can't pick him up in one paragraph, suggest alternatives in another, and what he can do in a separate paragraph.
task achievement
Include more details in your response, like specific activities your friend can do in your country and how to navigate from the airport.
coherence cohesion
The greeting and closing are appropriately warm and fit the context well.
task achievement
The tone of the letter is very friendly and suitable for writing to a friend.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Regretfully
  • commitments
  • emergency
  • reputable
  • convenient
  • alternative
  • ride-sharing
  • shuttle service
  • accommodation
  • customs
  • phrases
  • tourist attractions
  • cuisine
  • cultural experiences
  • outdoor activities
  • itinerary
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