Psychologists have known for many years that colour can affect how people feel. For this reason, attention should be given to colour schemes when decorating places such as offices and hospitals. How true is this statement? How far does colour influence people's health and capacity for work? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience

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of the earliest
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that we learn in childhood. As we grow up, we learn how to use it.
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in our
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important effect
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the places that we use it
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known about the impact of colours on the mood of employees and their performances. It is believed that if you work in
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office with colorful
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you find it hard to concentrate on your job and your performance will decrease
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time. Interestingly,
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it's better to use bright and bold
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and
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. e.g for archituctural studio. In my university, when I studied
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we had a studio with yellow
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and
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furniture and that made me feel fabulous when I did my
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or worked there. It was
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energetic environment for me. With the aim of better output,
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is
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a good performance. Clearly, patients wouldn’t
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to recover themselves in a room with bright colours.
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nurses can not able to relax and rest there.
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wall
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and furniture with
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on
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. The reason
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that is
children need entertainment in
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to be able to tolerate the treatment. As far as I am concerned , there is a direct and strong link between
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and mood and performance. So designers should pay more attention
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decorating places .
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it’s important who wants to occupy a building and decoration
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to be in a way that occupants are able to get the best out of their surroundings.
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