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The pie chart shows the amount of money that a children's charity located in the USA spent and received in one year, 2016. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie chart shows the amount of money that a children's charity located in the USA spent and received in one year, 2016. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The provided line graph illustrates information pertaining to the forest industry's
production
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 in the United Kingdom between 1980 and 2000. It can
also
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 be noted that the measurements were recorded in million tonnes (
MT
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) .
Overall
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, the
production
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 of paper and packaging experienced an upward trend,
whereas
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 the opposite was true for
wood
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pulp
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 and
sawn-
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sawn wood
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wood
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 decreasing during the period.
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, not only did paper and packaging increase over time,
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but it
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it
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they
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 became the most massive
production
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at the end
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 of the time frame. Looking at the statistics for paper and packaging
production
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 in
further
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 detail, which was the only category to observe an increase throughout the time scale. Specifically, it rose slightly from roughly 240MT in 1980 to exactly 250MT in 1990, before rocketing to exactly 350MT in the final year.
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, the
production
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 of
wood
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pulp
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 and
sawn-
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sawn wood
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wood
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 declined over the period. With regard to
wood
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pulp
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production
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, it witnessed a decrease to exactly 150MT by 1990 from nearly 170MT at the beginning,
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 observing a slight increase to approximately 160MT in 2000.
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, the
production
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 of
sawn-
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sawn wood
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wood
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 decreased from under 200MT to exactly 150MT between the first ten years, the same as
wood
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pulp
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,
however
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,
this
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 number declined continuously after that to around 130MT at the period's end.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words production, mt, wood, pulp with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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