The two maps below show the changes that have taken place in the town of Westley since 1815. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The two maps below show the changes that have taken place in the town of Westley since 1815.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The maps show how the town of
Westley
has been changed from 1815 to now.
Overall
we can see that there
are
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have been
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many changes in the
last
200 years and
Westley
has developed a lot. Transport has changed in
Westley
. Now there is a railway and a railway station. The road has extended longer and ends in a shopping business and living area.
Also
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Also,
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the road no longer goes
cross
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across
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the river to London. The houses have turned
to
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into
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a
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apply
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living and working
area
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areas
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.
Also
, the trees have been cut and now there is a housing estate. The buildings have changed now. The church is now
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the west
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west gate shopping centre
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West Gate Shopping Centre
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.
Furthermore
, the
coach
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coaching
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inn is now a sports centre and museum.
Finally
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Finally,
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Lord
Westley
’s house has been demolition and it is now a hotel and the
red lion
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Red Lion
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. Some places in
westley
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Westley
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have not changed for two hundred years,
for
example
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example,
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market square and the town hall are still the same.
Also
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Also,
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the lake is not changed.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words westley with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "show" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 6 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • residential area
  • amenities
  • thoroughfare
  • connectivity
  • industrial development
  • factory
  • public amenities
  • recreational facilities
  • educational facilities
  • residential expansion
  • apartment blocks
  • commercial activity
  • shopping centers
  • restaurants
  • single-family homes
  • development
  • open field
  • noticeable change
  • replacing
  • establishment
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