The pie chart illustrates the proportion of persons who are captured and the bar chart illustrates the reason why they are captured in the five years ending 1994 .

The pie chart illustrates the proportion of persons who are captured and the bar chart illustrates the reason why they are captured in the five years ending 1994

.
The pie diagrams illustrate the fraction of wrongdoers in both genders whether they
are
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caught or not when they committed crimes and the bar graph presents the percentage of seven different reasons
of arresting
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in five years between 1898 and 1994.
Overall
,
it is clear that
criminals mostly do not get arrested and most of them are males.
Moreover
, the
reason
the most
reason
that people are caught is public drinking and the least number of them have no answer.
To begin
with, the proportion of male lawbreakers, who were arrested from 1898 to 1994, represented a nominal 32% more than female criminals by 23%.
However
, the percentage of not being arrested in men was a massive 68%
while
women occupied a gigantic 91%. What is interesting to note is the fraction of males more than females by approximately 4 times. On the flip side, the main
reason
for most recent arrests was public drinking, with a large 30% in male individuals and an enormous 38% in female citizens.
In contrast
, the second
place
of
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women's
reason
was assaults, with 20%, and male's
reason
was
drink
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drivings
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, which registered well over 25%. A
no answer
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reason
came in
last
place
with a minuscule 4% of males and a meagre 7% of females. What is surprising to see is that the difference between the first
place
and the final
place
of women's
reason
was around 5 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Incarceration
  • Proportion
  • Pie chart
  • Bar chart
  • Demographic data
  • Socioeconomic factors
  • Correctional facilities
  • Legislation
  • Criminal justice system
  • Crime rate
  • Felony
  • Misdemeanor
  • Recidivism
  • Deterrence
  • Rehabilitation
  • Policy makers
  • Law enforcement agencies
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