The pie chart illustrates the proportion of persons who are captured and the bar chart illustrates the reason why they are captured in the five years ending 1994 .

The pie chart illustrates the proportion of persons who are captured and the bar chart illustrates the reason why they are captured in the five years ending 1994 .
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The pie diagrams illustrate the fraction of wrongdoers in both genders whether they
are
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caught or not when they committed crimes and the bar graph presents the percentage of seven different reasons
of arresting
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in five years between 1898 and 1994.
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,
it is clear that
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criminals mostly do not get arrested and most of them are males.
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, the
reason
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the most
reason
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that people are caught is public drinking and the least number of them have no answer.
To begin
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with, the proportion of male lawbreakers, who were arrested from 1898 to 1994, represented a nominal 32% more than female criminals by 23%.
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, the percentage of not being arrested in men was a massive 68%
while
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women occupied a gigantic 91%. What is interesting to note is the fraction of males more than females by approximately 4 times. On the flip side, the main
reason
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for most recent arrests was public drinking, with a large 30% in male individuals and an enormous 38% in female citizens.
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, the second
place
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of
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women's
reason
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was assaults, with 20%, and male's
reason
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was
drink
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drunk
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drivings
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driving
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, which registered well over 25%. A
no answer
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no-answer
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reason
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came in
last
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place
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with a minuscule 4% of males and a meagre 7% of females. What is surprising to see is that the difference between the first
place
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and the final
place
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of women's
reason
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was around 5 times.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words reason, place with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Incarceration
  • Proportion
  • Pie chart
  • Bar chart
  • Demographic data
  • Socioeconomic factors
  • Correctional facilities
  • Legislation
  • Criminal justice system
  • Crime rate
  • Felony
  • Misdemeanor
  • Recidivism
  • Deterrence
  • Rehabilitation
  • Policy makers
  • Law enforcement agencies
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