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Some people believe that it is better language students in small classes, others think the number of people in the classes doesn't matter.

#people #language #students #classes #doesn #matter
Although
, many
people
 think
students
 learn language in small
groups
, bigger
classes
 are better for
people
 which they can learn more effective.
Students
 should
study
 in big
groups
, that
classes
 aid more to learn language for
people
 especially for young generation. Many parents prefer their own children
study
 with lots of
people
. Because it is more effective and captivating to learn better for
students
.
Such
 as: in huge class,
people
 start to speak fluent, like an American
people
 and without errors. Because student listens each other's opinion and they correction of mistakes.
On the other hand
 , if
people
study
 bigger
classes
, they clearing-off lesser money compared to small
classes
 money. Since little
groups
 are considered individual so their monthly fee is more expensive than big class. As that courses are more comfortable and easier for
study
 and payment. Many
people
 think tiny grades are better in comparison with large
groups
. On the one hand it is true
however
 not all time. There are more sides in small
classes
.
Firstly
 ; teacher easily engage with
students
 than large group's teacher because they have a more time.
Secondly
 ;
students
 submit own homework and speaking to their own teacher. They do not discuss with their partners.
Such
 as: it will be diligently more effective, if
students
 want to learn that language without anyone's wish. The most significant thing is children try yo be successful person after that all thing will be easy for they. In my point of view, larger
groups
 are effectual for
people
 especially young generation and they do not suffer from payment.
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Ensure that your essay has a clear and concise introduction that presents the topic and your position on it. This will help set a clear direction for your argument.
coherence cohesion
Work on organizing your ideas better. Each paragraph should have a clear main idea and supporting details. Transitions between paragraphs should flow smoothly.
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Include more specific examples to illustrate your points. These examples should be relevant and clearly linked to the main argument of each paragraph.
coherence cohesion
Conclusion should summarize the main points effectively and reinforce your position. Avoid introducing new information in the conclusion.
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Be careful with grammatical accuracy and word choice. Small errors can make the essay harder to understand.
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Your essay presents a general argument for both sides of the debate, which shows an understanding of the topic.
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You have made an effort to support your main points with examples, which is good for illustrating your arguments.
coherence cohesion
Your essay attempts to address both sides of the issue, which is a good approach to display a balanced view.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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