Write about the following topic: Convenience foods will become increasingly prevalent and eventually replace traditional food and traditional ways of food preparation. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Many people have different ways to think about it.but now traditional food has changed to modern
foods
.I do not agree about
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with
this
idea of changing local foods
to modern foods
in this
era
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traditional Add a comma
hand,
foods
was
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were
switching
to modern Wrong verb form
switched
foods
because of alteration
of zona now.Correct article usage
the alteration
However
,many pupils think that should be relpace
in order they can find interesting Correct your spelling
ready
of
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apply
customer
when they sell it,if it will Fix the agreement mistake
customers
be
stay in their pack like Unnecessary verb
apply
long
time ago might be it will not to popular in Add an article
a long
this
modern era.Nevertheless
,number
of communities think Change the article
a number
the number
that is
not too good to try it.Eventually,a lot of factorys
of Correct your spelling
factors
factories
this
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these
foods
has
thought that they have to move to Correct subject-verb agreement
have
other style
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another style
other styles
such
as,
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apply
advertaisment
,packaging and the sense.Correct your spelling
advertising
For example
, in my home town seller has made a good snack from Correct your spelling
a good
good
agood
packaging and Correct your spelling
good
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advertisement
advertisements
advertaisment
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advertisement even though
eventhough
it was old food
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even though
On the other hand
,some places also
has
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have
keeped
the local Correct your spelling
kept
foods
to be a
original Correct article usage
apply
foods
as long as long
time ago.Add an article
a long
In
addition
it will have Add a comma
addition,
a
original taste from our heritage.Change the article
an
For instance
,I take serabi
for Correct your spelling
serai
this
, local foods
as this
have not cahnge
from Correct your spelling
change
changed
this
arise,and it was keep
it from Change the verb form
kept
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the flavor
a flavor
flavor
and contain Change the spelling
flavour
of
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apply
ingredience
of Correct your spelling
ingredients
this
.Event
many of Correct your spelling
Even
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its rival
rival
it was really selling in the market because they had brought original Fix the agreement mistake
rivals
foos
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foods
..
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.
...
Lastly
,l believe that who is sell
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selling
this
, it was verry
popular in my country because Correct your spelling
very
event
it has no Correct your spelling
even
popular
in the other places.Replace the word
popularity
Also
it cand
help old seller from their economic Correct your spelling
can
for
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apply
cost
of living as they can sell in the park or in the market
In Add an article
the cost
conclusion
local Add a comma
conclusion,
foods
cannot be changed by modern foods
event it was cahnged
from packaging and Correct your spelling
changed
advertaisment
,because Correct your spelling
advertisement
advertisements
traditionl
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traditional
foods
has
original Change the verb form
have
flavor
from Change the spelling
flavour
long
time ago.Add an article
a long
Also
if we can keep it it will help seller
from Correct article usage
the seller
originality
of Correct article usage
the originality
this
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The essay addresses the prompt and includes relevant examples from experience and knowledge.
task achievement
The essay reflects a genuine attempt to discuss the issue of traditional versus convenience foods.
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