The charts below give information on the ages of the populations of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projections for 2050.

The charts below give information on the ages of the populations of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projections for 2050.
The pie charts illustrate the proportions of residents divided by age categories in two countries,
Yemen
and Italy, in 2000 and expectations in 2050.
Firstly
, in 2000 the
number
of
children
in
Yemen
accounted for the half of total population, followed by
adults
with 46.3%,
however
in 2050 the main category,
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for 57.3%, will become
people
15-59 years old,
while
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the number
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of
children
will decrease to 37%.
Secondly
, in both
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countries
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the
number
of
people
in
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age
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the age
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of
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more than 60 will be doubled during
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period, albeit in
Yemen
this
category will
remains
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the smallest, less than 6%,
while
in Italy there will be 42.3% of
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the total
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population.
Finally
, in
Italy
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Italy,
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the proportion of both
adults
and
children
will decrease, from 61.6% to 46.2% and from 14.3% to 11.5% respectively.
Overall
, in Italy
number
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the number
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of
adults
and
children
will reduce and old
people
will take almost the same share as
adults
. In
Yemen
number
of
children
will shrink in favour of
adults
and old
people
.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words yemen, number, children, adults, people with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportions" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • age demographics
  • age structure
  • population distribution
  • youthful population
  • ageing population
  • life expectancy
  • birth rate
  • demographic shift
  • population projection
  • median age
  • dependents
  • working-age population
  • elderly dependents
  • geriatric
  • fertility rate
  • migration
  • demographic trends
  • baby boomers
  • demographic dividend
  • population pyramid
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