The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table demonstrates how many people had visited Ashdown Museum in the years before and after its renovation. Meanwhile, The charts illustrate the rate of individuals' satisfaction rate regarding their visit during the same time span.
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it is clear that
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after refurbishment, not only the
number
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of
visitors
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but
also
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their satisfaction rate increased significantly. Regarding the year before implementing refurbishments, the
number
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of
visitors
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was solely 74,000 people annually, the majority of which considered their visit unsatisfactory with 40% and 10% of them being dissatisfied and very dissatisfied, respectively.
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, the survey results depict that less than 50% of them were pleased with their visits with 30% satisfied and 10% very satisfied. Looking at the year after renewing the museum, the
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of
visitors
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surged dramatically to 92,000.
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to
this
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increment, their satisfaction rates
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witnessed a rise to more than 70% of the
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.
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, dissatisfaction rates dwindled substantially to only 20% of the figure. Importantly, the proportion of people who didn't answer the survey remains unchanged at 5%. Comparing these two years, the renovation proved effective as it increased the
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of attendees
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to making them pleased with their visit.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, in addition".
Vocabulary: Replace the words number, visitors with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • refurbishment
  • visitor numbers
  • satisfaction levels
  • very satisfied
  • satisfied
  • neither satisfied nor dissatisfied
  • dissatisfied
  • very dissatisfied
  • survey results
  • comparison
  • impact
  • effectiveness
  • visitor experience
  • overall improvement
  • increase/decrease in visitors
  • positive feedback
  • negative feedback
  • visitor survey
  • survey period
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