the diagram below shows how instant noodles are manufactured.

the diagram below shows how instant noodles are manufactured.
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The given scheme explains the process of instant noodles production.
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it reveals how
this
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product
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appears on
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shelves. In general, there are eight stages of
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manufacturing
before the final
product
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is
being
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delivered to the store. The first operation consists of putting flour into storage silos.
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the flour is mixed with some other ingredients into dough in a special machine. The substance is
further
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stretched into sheets which a cut into thin strips during the fourth stage. The following operation involves the strips too. At
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moment the noodles are formed into discs. After
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the round-shape figures are cooked in oil and dried. The seventh stage consists of placing the
product
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into cups and adding some
vegetavles
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vegetables
and spices to it. The final part of
production
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process is mainly about the packaging. At
this
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moment freshly printed
lables
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labels
are added to the cups which are sealed after that. As soon as the
product
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(instant noodles) is ready to leave the factory, it is shipped to a shopping facility.
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, it takes a considerably long time for a
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • manufacturing process
  • mixing ingredients
  • dough preparation
  • sheeting
  • steaming
  • cutting techniques
  • dehydration
  • deep-frying
  • cooling system
  • packaging
  • quality control
  • production line
  • mass production
  • food preservation
  • convenience food
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