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The diagram below shows the plan of a library in 2001 and 2009. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows the plan of a library in 2001 and 2009. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pictures
gives
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 information about the plan of a
library
 from 2001 to 2009.
Overall
, there was
significant
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a significant
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 change
between
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 the plan of
library
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the library
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 in the years 2001 and 2009 . First of all, in both years 2001 and 2009 in
south
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 diagram librarian's desk there was
same
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 location
that
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no Chang . It
is
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can be seen nuder in the right hand there
added
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 a computer section in 2009
whereas
,
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there was a
hug
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 change in 2001 in the west there
are
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 two
section
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and
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removed to
constructed
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 six regions by 2009.
However
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 the plan of
library
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the library
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 added
new
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a new
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 area in 2009 it was
that
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the
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 children's area
moreover
 in 2001
in
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the north area there was
replacement
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 the section
of
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fiction
to
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with
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 children's
book
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books
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 by 2009
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in addition
 the place of newspapers and periodical was recovered to films and DVDs in
the
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2009. In the middle picture of
library
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the library
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 in 2001 there
was
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 eight tables
in contrast
 during of period 2009 there
was
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 four tables .
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words library with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "tables" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • self-service machines
  • computer stations
  • digital resources
  • book sections
  • fiction, non-fiction, reference
  • café area
  • repositioned
  • user preferences
  • management strategies
  • children's area
  • youth engagement
  • educational activities
  • meeting rooms
  • collaborative spaces
  • community events
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