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The two maps below show the town of Barmouth before and after proposed new changes to stop cars entering the old town. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The two maps below show the town of Barmouth before and after proposed new changes to stop cars entering the old town. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The maps illustrate the comparison between
the
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Barmouth town in 1936 and
in
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2007 after the implementation of
restriction
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restrictions
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 on cars entering the old town.
Overall
, there were big changes in the
city
 and only
post
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 office, library, and bank located in the middle of the
city
were still existed
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. The
area
 outside the
central
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 of the
city
were
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was
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 totally changing. In the past, there were 3 trees,
however
, it turned to left only 1 tree in 2007.
Beside
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 that, the government offices and the
farm land
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farmland
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 located in
same
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area
 changed into
museum
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a museum
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 and gold course,
meanwhile
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 the cycle path and river changed into
the
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 road and
residental
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residential
area
 in
the
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2007. Turning to
inner
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the inner
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 side of the central
city
, only 3 building had
been existed
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existed
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as
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in
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 the same condition which
was
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were
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post
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a post
the post
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 office, bank, and library. There were 2
building
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buildings
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 which
was
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were
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sweet
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 shop and butches
being
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marging
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margins
margin
merging
 into the supermarket,
also
 there was a flower shop that was changed to
travel
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 agent.
Beside
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 the changing
on
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of
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 the building, there
were
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was
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 an empty
area
 in the middle, but in
the
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2007 it
were
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was
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 turned
to
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into
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the
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 shopping centre.
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