The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one are of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and charts show how it was distributes. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area in Britain.

The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one are of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and charts show how it was distributes.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.The table and  charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area in Britain.
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The given table and pie charts illustrate three different categories
on
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the police budget in a certain area of Britain for 2017 and 2018. The table shows
income
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the income
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area of
money
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while
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the charts show how the
money
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was spent.
Overall
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, it can be seen from
table
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the table
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,
there
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that there
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was an upward trend for all three different categories between 2017 and 2018.
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, in terms of distributing area,
amount
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the amount
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of
money
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to
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spent on salaries decreased
while
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salaries
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the salaries
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category increased.
In addition
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,
percentage
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the percentage
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of spent on
money
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for
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technology
unchanged
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is unchanged
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.
To begin
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with
sources
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the sources
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of
police
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the police
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budget,
it is clear that
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category of National Government
which
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had the highest amount of
money
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in the given two
years
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, at £175.5m.
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, it was almost twice as much as Local Texas which was the second largest
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of police budget.
Beside
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these, other sources
such
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as grants insignificantly increased over the time period, at £38m in 2017 and £38.5m in 2018.
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, spent on
money
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for salaries had the highest percentage in 2017 and 2018, at 75% and 69% respectively.
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, it decreased
almost
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just over
the
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one in twenty in 2018. In opposite,
money
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was spent on technology, which was the least in total in all
years
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, noticeably
rose
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from 8% to 14%, and it accounts
just
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for just
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below
the
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double. In both
years
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, buildings and transport
which
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had
percentage
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a percentage
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as
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approximately a quarter and during
the
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both
years
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it
steadily
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was steadily
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unchanged.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words money, years with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "unchanged" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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