The chart below shows the number of men and women in further education in Britain in three periods and whether they were studying full time or part time.

The chart below shows the number of men and women in further education in Britain in three periods and whether they were studying full time or part time.
The bar chart illustrates the enrollment of men and women in higher
education
in
UK
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the UK
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across the three
time
periods,
along with
their enrollment status, either full-
time
or part-
time
. First and
above all
, in 1970 and 1971
average
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an average
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1000
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of 1000
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male
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males
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were in
full
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full-time
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time
education
and
this
number
declined to approximately 850
for
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in
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1980 and 1990.
In contrast
,
number
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the number
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of part-
time
students increased over
the
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apply
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time
although
the
number
was mostly lower than the
number
of humans
which
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who
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were registered in full-
time
education
. In 1970, nearly 100 people were in
part
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part-time
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time
education
and in other 20 years,
this
number
raised to 200. It is crucial to state that, in 1970,
number
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the number
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of females who attended
to
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apply
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full
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full-time
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time
education
was about 700 and
this
number
reached
to
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almost 1200 in the given
time
period and it is even higher than the
number
of males who were in full-
time
education
in
given
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the given
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three
time
periods.
Additionally
, the amount of female part-
time
students increased over
time
and reached
to
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apply
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over 200 in 1990 even
it
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though it
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was nearly 20 in 1970. In essence,
according to
given
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the given
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data females came a long way compared to males
about
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in
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full-
time
and part-
time
education
in Britain in three periods.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words education, time, number with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • further education
  • full-time study
  • part-time study
  • trend
  • overall number
  • time period
  • gender differences
  • increase
  • decrease
  • analyze
  • evaluate
  • societal changes
  • economic factors
  • educational policies
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