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The diagram below shows the process for recycling plastic bottles. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows the process for recycling plastic bottles. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The diagram here illustrates the recycling cycle of
plastic
bottles
 in nine consecutive steps.
Overall
, the process can be
devided
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divided
 into three
seperate
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separate
 phases, from collection to
compress
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compression
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, from crushing to pellet,
from
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and from
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 pellet to final product. The recycling procedure of
plastic
bottles
start
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 with dumping these
bottles
 in bins which are specific for recycling. From there the recycling
dump-truck
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dump truck
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 collects and transports them to
recycling
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a recycling
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 plant. Here, these
bottles
 are sorted
in
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into
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 different sections.
Then
 it is compressed into blocks. In
next
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the next
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 step, the blocks are run through a crusher to shred
it
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apply
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into small pieces, followed by washing, in order to rinse
of
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off
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 dust and other unwanted substances.
Then
 these small pieces are put in a pellet machine to make
plastic
 pellets. The
plastic
 pellets are heated in the following step to produce raw materials for
plastic
.
Finally
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 the raw materials are used to fabricate various types of
plastic
 products for use.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words plastic, bottles with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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