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The table shows key data on the demographics of four countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table shows key data on the demographics of four countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table compares
population
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,
GDP
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 and average life expectancy in four nations.
Overall
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,
China
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 with the largest
population
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 has the lowest
GDP
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in contrast
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 to the
USA
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 with the highest.
People
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 in the
UK
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 tend to live longer than those in any other examined
countries
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country
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. Starting with the
population
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, the
population
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 of
China
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 is by far the most dominant with 1357000000, followed by the
USA
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 whose
population
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 is 318875000, which is almost twice as much as the number of
people
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 in Russia.
On the other hand
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, the
UK
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 has the lowest
population
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 with 64937000. Turning to
GDP
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, the
USA
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 seems to be the largest producer of capital with 53681, which is soon followed by the
UK
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 which has 41787.
China
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 is the country which has the lowest
GDP
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 with 6807, which is only about half of that of Russia.
Finally
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, the average life expectancy is the longest in the
UK
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 at about 81.
Furthermore
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,
people
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 in
China
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 and Russia tend to live longer than 70 as the former reaches just above 75
whereas
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 the latter is just below that
whereas
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people
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 in the
USA
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 have the shortest longevity with slightly below 70.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "whereas".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words population, gdp, china, usa, people, uk with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • demographic metrics
  • age distribution
  • urbanization levels
  • population growth rates
  • life expectancy
  • birth rates
  • immigration policies
  • economic development
  • geographical size
  • historical factors
  • health care systems
  • infrastructure
  • quality of life
  • proportion
  • population size
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