The chart below shows the average cost of a monthly contract for four different mobiles ( cellphones) in a European country from January to September 2002, measured in euro.

The chart below shows the average cost of a monthly contract for four different mobiles ( cellphones) in a European country from January to September 2002, measured in euro.
Contained in the line graph is data pertaining to a comparison of the mediocre cost that four distinct mobile phone companies
charge
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for monthly contracts in 2002. The units are measured in
euros
.
Overall
, three out of four the price of contracts experienced an upward trend
whereas
the opposite was true for
Sim
TX
.
Additionally
, Alpha underwent the most dramatic climb in the
last
four months. Regarding Domo and Lex, the two figures fluctuated to quite similar degrees. Domo offered the most expensive plan at around 15
euros
in the first month, followed by Lex at 12
euros
, albeit in the
last
three months, Domo enjoyed a downward tendency and
finally
ended at 23
euros
,
while
Lex was the opposite and ended at 18
euros
. Moving onto two remaining figures, which had the significant opposite in price.
Sim
TX
started at 9
euros
while
the beginning point of Alpha was at 5
euros
. Five months later, they enjoyed a fluctuation but still remained the same distance.
However
, three years later, Alpha surpassed
Sim
TX
in Jujy and soared to reach the highest point in September at 25
euros
.
While
Sim
TX
declined in price and turned into the least one.
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