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You have just moved into a new home and are plannig to hold a party. You are worried that the noise may disturb your neighbour. Write a letter to your neighbour. In your letter . introduce yourself . discribe your plans for the party . invite your neibourhour to come

#home #plannig #party #noise #neighbour #discribe #plans #neibourhour
Dear Sir, I writing
this
 letter to inform you about my plan to have a huge party
in
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 my
house
, but I would like to tell you a couple of things. My name is Bryan and I am a new member of
this
 resident who has a
house
 in
sunflower alley
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Sunflower Alley
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number 46 beside your
house
. We first met at the entrance of
recident
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 the day before yesterday, I hope you remember it. I have
a
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 plan to
do
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have
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 a huge party
in
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at
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 my
house
 on Saturday night
such
 as a music and dance show,
however
, I am sure
this
 celebration really
makes
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 a big noise in
surrounding
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 area,
therefore
, I
ask
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 your permission
before
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.
And for
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 my
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Thanksgiving
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thanksgiving
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, I am inviting you to join
this
 celebration night. I am waiting for you and your magic costume. Yours sincerely Bryan
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task achievement
Consider adding a brief introduction of your party such as the reason for the celebration. It adds context and invites the reader to understand the significance of the event.
coherence cohesion
Make sure to articulate your paragraphs more clearly, ensuring each one covers a single idea, especially regarding your plans and the invitation details.
greeting and closing
The greeting and closing are polite and appropriate, setting a friendly and respectful tone.
complete response
The letter responds to all parts of the task, including introducing yourself, describing the party, and inviting the neighbor.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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