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WRITING TASK 1 You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The bar chart below shows estimated world illiteracy rates by region and by gender for the last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

WRITING TASK 1 You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The bar chart below shows estimated world illiteracy rates by region and by gender for the last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.
#minutes #bar #world #illiteracy #rates #region #gender #year #summarise #information #features #comparisons
The chart shows the estimation of world
illiteracy
rates
 from
particular
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a particular
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region
 identified by gender in
previous
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the previous
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 year, with units given in percentages.
Overall
, the ratings of
illiteracy
 in every
region
shows
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show
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the
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that
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women
 have a higher number than
the
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men
. In Developed countries, the
illiteracy
rates
below
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are below
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 ten percent for both
men
 and
women
and
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apply
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becoming the lowest
region
 with
illiteracy
rates
. followed by Latin America/ Caribbean become the second lowest
rates
 with slightly above ten
percent
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per cent
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 for all gender. in
comparable
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between
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Sub-Saharan Africa
two
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is two
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 times more than East Asia / Oceania with more than 30% for
the
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men
 and almost 50% for
the
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women
.
However
, there was a substantial gap between gender in Arab states, the difference between
the
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men
 and
the
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women
are
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is
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 over 20% with most of the
women
are
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being
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 illiterates. So
as
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to
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in
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 South Asia, the number of literate
women
are
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is
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 only
minority
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a minority
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with
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below 50%. And become the highest
region
 with
illiteracy
.
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