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The process of producing water by solar powered pump and filter.

#process #water #filter
The given figure illustrates the production of drinkable
water
 which
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bases
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 on
the
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solar energy.
Overall
,
this
 is a process with five steps total. Commencing with
well’s
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water
,
this
 liquid will go through the mechanic stages and end up being drinking
water
 contained in a moveable container. Beginning with the power generation steps, the energy from the sun will be extracted and the energy will be converted to be suitable for the pump machine. Continuing with the pump,
this
 machine, which is placed in the underground well, will distribute the
water
 to the tank until the
water
 level
reach
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 the limit which was set up before.
Then
 the
water
 will be purified by the filter in the tank.
Finally
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 the refined
water
 will be poured into a transportable container.
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task achievement
The introduction generally indicates the overall process but could benefit from a clearer thesis statement outlining the key stages in brief.
coherence cohesion
Each step in the process is described, but the transitions between sentences could be smoother to enhance flow. Consider using sequence connectors like 'Subsequently' or 'Thereafter'.
coherence cohesion
Be cautious with grammar and phrasing. For example, 'bases on the solar energy' should be 'is based on solar energy’, and 'until the water level reach the limit' should be 'until the water level reaches the set limit'.
task achievement
You have presented a clear sequence of steps involved in the process, contributing to a comprehensive response.
coherence cohesion
The paragraphs are appropriately structured, with each one focusing on a distinct part of the process.

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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • renewable energy
  • solar panels
  • electrical energy
  • water pump
  • storage tanks
  • filtration system
  • sediment filtration
  • activated carbon filtration
  • UV purification
  • off-grid locations
  • environmental benefits
  • sustainable solutions
  • clean drinking water
  • extraction
  • purification process
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