You are planning a holiday and want to find out about the kinds of holiday packages that can be arranged by a local company. Write a letter to the company to as for information about the holiday packages they offer. In your letter: say where and when you would like to go include details about the kind of holiday you would like to take say what kind of information you would like to receive.
Dear Sir,
I am writing
this
letter to inform you regarding the destination
that is
I interested to visit
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in visiting
while
asking for information about the holiday
packages that you offer for me.
Recently, there is
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has been
destination
that is
very famous on social media I have seen. The destination
is located in East Lombok which is called Sembalun. Therefore
, I am very interested in choosing that destination
for my holiday
next week date
16th. it will be the summer season
I would like to take a Correct your spelling
the
holiday
of one week full with my family including free transportation and lunch. and will be happy if the company provide some agenda such
as,
playing games for a Remove the comma
apply
childrens
I would like to know what Correct your spelling
children
children's
is time
the departure as a member Verb problem
apply
holiday
package and whether includes accommodation as well. there are of
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apply
destination
choices that
is
will be great ways to make Unnecessary verb
apply
more
enjoyable.
Thank you so much, I am looking forward to hearing you soon
Yours Sincerely
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grammar
Try to avoid minor grammatical errors, such as missing articles and slight spelling mistakes, for a smoother read.
task achievement
Consider providing a clearer request for specific information you need to know about the holiday packages, such as activities or special accommodations.
writing tone
The letter has a polite and appropriate tone, which is suitable for a formal request.
greeting and closing
The closing statement is well-written, showing politeness and a sense of anticipation.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite