​​The pie charts show the average consumption of food in the world in 2008 compared to two countries: China and India. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

​​The pie charts show the average consumption of food in the world in 2008 compared to two countries: China and India. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The pie charts given
explained
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explain
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about
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apply
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the
overall
consumption of various types of
food
in 2008, particularly in
china
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China
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,
india
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India
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, and the world trend. The
overall
trend shows the most consumed
type
of
food
in
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apply
show examples
worldwide is manufactured
food
.
This
also
happened in
china
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China
show examples
and
india
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India
show examples
. In
china
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China
show examples
,
this
followed
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is followed
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by
type
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the type
a type
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of
food
that consists
vegetables
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of vegetables
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and fruits.
However
,
this
quite
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is quite
show examples
different in
india
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India
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because the second largest consumed
type
of
food
is animal
food
. In 2008, processed
food
became the most
favorite
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favourite
show examples
food
in
china
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China
show examples
,
this
showed by the
percentation
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presentation
fermentation
around 34%
percents
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percent
show examples
,
Eventhough
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even though
vegetables and fruits became the second most consumed
type
of
food
in
china
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China
show examples
that have 32
percents
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per cent
show examples
. These
followed
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were followed
show examples
by nuts, and
consequently
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consequently,
show examples
animal
food
became the least
favorite
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favourite
show examples
food
in
china
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China
show examples
that
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with
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only 15%.
In contrast
,
besides
the
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apply
show examples
processed
food
, animal
food
became the second
favorite
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favourite
show examples
food
in
India
. It takes 27%
percents
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percent
show examples
. These
followed
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are followed
show examples
by vegetables and fruits that
has
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have
show examples
less percentation
that
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than
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around 23%.
Due to
the
percentation
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presentation
fermentation
data, Nuts and
seed
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seeds
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became the least consumed
food
in
india
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India
show examples
that
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with
show examples
only 11%
percents
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percent
show examples
.
To sum up
,
overall
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the overall
show examples
trend showed
the
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that
show examples
processed
food
became
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has become
show examples
the
favorite
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favourite
show examples
food
in
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apply
show examples
worldwide,
china
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in china
show examples
, and
india
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India
show examples
. After the processed
food
, people in
china
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China
show examples
tend to
became
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become
show examples
vegan,
whila
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while
people in
india
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India
show examples
choose to be
carnivorian
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carnivorous
.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall".
Vocabulary: Replace the words food, china, india, type, percents with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Average consumption
  • Global composition
  • Food category
  • Meat, vegetables, fruits, grains
  • Percentage, proportion
  • Comparative analysis
  • Similarities and differences
  • Intake, consumption patterns
  • Striking differences
  • Notable similarities
  • Higher/lower consumption
  • Significant difference
  • Proportionate share
  • Relevant comparison
  • General trend
  • Insight
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