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Band 4.5

In many countries, more and more people choose to buy imported food rather than food produced locally. Why people buy imported food? What could be done to encourage people to buy local food?

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are
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 curious, which
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 money on imported
food
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more
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than local
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.
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, including
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focuses
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of
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. It must be understood that having
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curiosity
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 can impact on
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's spending.
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 buying foreign
production
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 because imported
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 suitable to their habit.
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make
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misunderstanding
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about
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imported
food
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that
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 consumers think it is better than traditional
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 because of money cost.
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, foreign
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 is bought by many people as a trend.
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, cherry fruit in foreign countries and orange fruit in Vietnam have the same
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vitamin C inside them, but most
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 consumers choose to spend more money on
cherry
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 because of people's
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. Another argument worth considering is that
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 should increase
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tax
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 on foreign
product
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 to improve the number of local
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 spending. When increasing
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, the individual may feel that foreign
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 is less attractive.
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, consumers decided to focus on traditional
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, leading to the improvement of them.
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according to
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 an article published in Vietnam in 2023, a majority of American
food
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 was out of date because of high
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customer
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customers
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 did not focus on. In conclusion,
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 is the most significant reason that
impact
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 on foreign
food
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 spending by
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govenment
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increasing
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 to manage
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product
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task achievement
Ensure to thoroughly explain and support each main point in your essay. For example, when discussing why people buy imported food, provide more detailed examples and explanations.
coherence cohesion
Work on logically structuring your essay. Make sure each paragraph flows smoothly into the next, with clear transition sentences that link ideas together.
coherence cohesion
Revise your grammar and vocabulary usage. There were some grammatical errors and awkward phrasing that affected the overall clarity of your writing.
task achievement
Your essay provides a complete response to both questions, addressing why people buy imported food and what can be done to encourage people to buy local food.
coherence cohesion
You have included an introduction and a conclusion, which helps to frame your essay.
task achievement
The examples provided, such as the cherry and orange comparison, help to illustrate your points and make your argument clear.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • allure
  • novelty
  • diversity
  • perception
  • premium
  • globalization
  • cuisines
  • economic factors
  • subsidies
  • tariffs
  • competitive
  • farm-to-table
  • eco-conscious
  • consumption
  • sustainability
  • local economy
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