The bar chart below shows the amount of money invested in each category from five organisations.

The bar chart compares five different

organisations

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in terms of investment in machinery, building, staff training and

research

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Overall

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, organisation B spends a higher budget on these categories compared to the others,

while

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organisations

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D and E invest the least.

In addition

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, the spending pattern of organisation C is the most different from the remaining ones. Looking at

organisations

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A and B, it can be seen that each of them allocates more than €1

billion

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for building, employee training and

research

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, with the former investing the most in building (€1.5

billion

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) and the latter spending the most (€1.9

billion

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) providing training for its workers. Machinery is the least invested category in both

organisations

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, €1

billion

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and €0.9

billion

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respectively. Turning to

organisations

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D and E, the largest investment goes to the building category, with each devoting €1

billion

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while

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funding for

research

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is the lowest, €0.6 and €0.7

billion

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accordingly

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. In organisation C,

however

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, the highest funding is for machinery and

research

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(€1.3 million each),

whereas

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the figures for building and staff training are lower, €1 and 0.8

billion

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respectively.

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