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Write a letter to the airport flight manager about missing a business trip due to an accident that happened at the airport. Explain • - what was the accident? • - what was the result of missing the flight? • - what do you want them to do?

#airport #flight #manager #business #trip #accident
Dear manager, I am writing
this
 letter to bring to your
intention
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attention
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 the issues we are
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facing
faecing
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facing
 in your
airport
 today the issues with I leave my plane When
i
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I
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 come to
waiting
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the waiting
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 room I find wildfire in
the
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apply
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some rooms
untill
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until
i
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I
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cannot
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could not
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 see my room because
smoke
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the smoke
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 is thick smoke.
Also
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 I did not see my friends because of it
untill
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until
 I lost them.
Fourthermore
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Furthermore
,it was late to
handled
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handle
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by
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it by
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 employees from
airport
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the airport
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 and many people there
was
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were
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 very
angre
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angry
to
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about
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service
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the service
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airport
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the airport
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.
In
addition
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 they want to come back to their house.
Then
time
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the
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 table of
plane
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the plane
a plane
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 is
delay
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delayed
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. It was
very
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a very
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teriable
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terrible
 day
to
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for
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 me and I lost
my
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apply
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time to meet with my family, and my wife always
call
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called
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 me to find me
in
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at
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 the
airport
.
This
 is
bacause
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because
 of
accident
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an accident
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in
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at
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airport
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the airport
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.
Then
 I lost my time,
money
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and money
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. I would like to do two things that you should do
in
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 the
airport
.First,you have good rules to help when
accident
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an accident
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 come
anad
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and
 clear the problem.
Secondly
,you have many times to inform before
problem
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a problem
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come
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comes
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 and you should do
this
 I look forward to
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hearing
heraing
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hearing
 from you soon
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Yours
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Your
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Yours
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 sincerely Abi
Submitted by patricius.yohanes on

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coherence cohesion
Try to organize your thoughts more logically. Group similar points together and follow a clear structure: introduction, body, and conclusion.
coherence cohesion
Ensure each paragraph contains a single idea to improve readability.
task achievement
Provide more details about the accident and link your suggestions clearly to the problems you've described.
task achievement
The letter addresses all parts of the task: the accident, the results of missing the flight, and the requests for action.
task achievement
The tone of the letter is generally appropriate for a formal complaint.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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