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The chart below shows how frequent people in the USA ate in fast food restaurants between 2003 and 2013.

The chart below shows how frequent people in the USA ate in fast food restaurants between 2003 and 2013.
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The bar chart displays the frequency with which
people
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 in the USA ate in
fast-food
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 outlets between 2003 and 2013.
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, in all three years, the two largest groups were those eating in
fast-food
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 restaurants once a week and those eating there once or twice a month. Those eating there daily and those never eating there, in comparison, accounted for the smallest proportions. The majority of
people
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 ate in
fast-food
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 outlets weekly in both 2003 and 2006, at about 31% and 33% respectively.
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, the percentage dropped to 27 in 2013. The proportion of those in the “once or twice a month” category first fell from 30% to 25% between 2003 and 2006. It
then
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 went up significantly to 33% in 2013, making these
people
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 the largest group that year. The proportion of those eating in
fast-food
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 restaurants several times a week varied between 15% and 20%,
while
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 the proportion eating there a few times a year showed an increase from 13% to 15% over the period.
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, in none of the three years were more than 5% of
people
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 ever in either of the “
every day
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everyday
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” or “never” categories.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, fast-food with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportions" was used 4 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Fast food consumption
  • Frequency
  • Dining trends
  • Demographic factors
  • Peak periods
  • Downward/upward trend
  • Lifestyle choices
  • Nutritional awareness
  • Economic impact
  • Health implications
  • Convenience foods
  • Eating habits
  • Statistical evidence
  • Year-over-year comparison
  • Fluctuation
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