The diagram below shows the life cycle of a species of large fish called the salmon. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

The diagram below shows the life cycle of a species of large fish called the salmon. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
The flow chart depicts the
salmon
was called
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in the life
cycle
of a species of large fish.
Overall
, there are three
step
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steps
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for
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in
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the life
cycle
of
salmon
start
eggs
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with eggs
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and
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apply
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next
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the next
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is
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life in the
river
then
last
in the sea. The first
about
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was about
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salmon
eggs, it was often
finded
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found
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on the under stones in
upper
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the upper
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river
. The time of
eggs
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egg
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process
around
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is around
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5
until
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to
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6 months. It is growth in reeds and
then
they
are moving
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move
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to
lower
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the lower
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river
as
second
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the second
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stage. In the lower
river
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river,
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the
salmon
live approximately 4 years before it move to open sea.
Third
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cycle
is growing in the sea just below 5 years. There are sizes of the
salmon
in accordance with
cycle
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the cycle
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. In the
fry
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fry,
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the
salmon
has a size
around
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of around
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3-8 centimeters.
Secondly
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is smolt the
salmon
has
size
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a size
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approximately
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of approximately
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12-15
centimeters
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centimetres
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and the
last
cycle
is adult
salmon
with
the
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a
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length
around
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of around
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70-76
centimeters
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centimetres
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 70%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words salmon, cycle, river with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.

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