The diagram below shows the life cycle of a species of large fish called the salmon. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
The flow chart depicts the
salmon
was called
in the life Verb problem
apply
cycle
of a species of large fish.
Overall
, there are three step
Change to a plural noun
steps
for
the life Change preposition
in
cycle
of salmon
start eggs
Change preposition
with eggs
and
Correct word choice
apply
next
Correct article usage
the next
is
life in the Unnecessary verb
apply
river
then
last
in the sea.
The first about
Add a missing verb
was about
salmon
eggs, it was often finded
on the under stones in Correct your spelling
found
upper
Add an article
the upper
river
. The time of eggs
process Fix the agreement mistake
egg
around
5 Add a missing verb
is around
until
6 months. It is growth in reeds and Change preposition
to
then
they are moving
to Wrong verb form
move
lower
Add an article
the lower
river
as second
stage. In the lower Change the article
the second
river
the Add a comma
river,
salmon
live approximately 4 years before it move to open sea. Third
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The third
cycle
is growing in the sea just below 5 years.
There are sizes of the salmon
in accordance with cycle
. In the Correct article usage
the cycle
fry
the Add a comma
fry,
salmon
has a size around
3-8 centimeters. Change preposition
of around
Secondly
is smolt the Change the word
Second
salmon
has size
Add an article
a size
approximately
12-15 Change preposition
of approximately
centimeters
and the Change the spelling
centimetres
last
cycle
is adult salmon
with the
length Correct article usage
a
around
70-76 Change preposition
of around
centimeters
.Change the spelling
centimetres
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 70%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words salmon, cycle, river with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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