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The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008.

The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008.
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The column charts illustrate the destination of UK
graduate
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 and postgraduate
students
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 who did not choose a full-time job after college in 2008.
Overall
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, the
number
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 of both
graduate
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 and postgraduate
students
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 who chose
further
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 study was the highest among all categories.
However
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, the figure for voluntary work was the lowest by far in each chart.
To begin
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 with,
further
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 study was the most popular among
graduate
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 and postgraduate learners with 29,665 and 2,725
students
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 respectively.
Moreover
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, the
number
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 of
students
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 who were involved in voluntary jobs accounted for the least
number
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 of
students
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 with 3,500
graduate
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students
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 and 345
students
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 who were studying for a second qualification.
In addition
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, the figure for
students
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 who tend to be occupied in a part-time job is the second highest with 17,735 and 2,535
graduate
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 and postgraduate individuals separately. It is worth noting that, 16,235
graduate
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students
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 were unemployed after leaving college.
Nevertheless
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,
this
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number
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 is much fewer with regard to postgraduate
students
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 with 1,625 scholars in 2008.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "further".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words graduate, students, number with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Graduate
  • Postgraduate
  • Full-time work
  • Further education
  • Part-time work
  • Unemployment
  • Volunteering
  • Traveling
  • Gap year
  • Career progression
  • Job market
  • Transition
  • Academic life
  • Professional sphere
  • Economic factors
  • Social factors
  • Financial crisis
  • Long-term impact
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