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You recently received an email from your English-speaking friend, Pat, inviting you to stay and asking you to a special party. Read Pat's email and the notes you have made. Then write an email to Pat, using all your notes.

#email #friend #party #notes
Dear Pat, It was great to hear from you after so long. How are you doing? I hope all goes well with you. In your
last
 email, you asked me some things. Today, I am writing to answer your questions. You said that you are going to have a holiday. It’s a great idea if you go to my city and stay with me during your holiday. Currently, I
also
 have a summer vacation, so if you go there, we will be
traveling
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travelling
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 together. I can take you to some distinguished places in Hanoi
such
 as Ho Chi Minh Mausoleum, One Cot Pagoda, and so on.
Accordingly
, we can talk and share everything. Is it OK if I see you next weekend and we will have a celebration for five days in my urban? Well, I have to stop now. I hope you find
this
 useful. Keep in touch, please. I am looking forward to hearing from you. Best wishes,
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coherence cohesion
To improve logical structure, ensure that all the points flow smoothly. For example, you can use linking words and phrases to make transitions between ideas clearer.
coherence cohesion
Work on supporting your main points with more specific details and examples. This can make your essay more convincing and detailed.
task achievement
To achieve a more comprehensive response, ensure that all parts of the task are adequately addressed. You could elaborate more on your plans and include more about the celebration.
task achievement
Include specific and relevant examples to support your ideas. For instance, mention particular activities you plan to do during the celebration or details about the party.
coherence cohesion
You have a clear introduction and conclusion which helps in framing your response effectively.
task achievement
You responded to Pat's invitation and made plans for the visit, which is a good way to address the task promptly.

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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