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The chart below gives information about global population percentages and distribution of wealth by region.

The chart below gives information about global population percentages and distribution of wealth by region.
The bar chart provides data on the proportion of the world's
population
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 and share of
wealth
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 in different regions of the continent.
Overall
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, in most of the given areas, the percentage of inhabitants supersedes the distribution of
wealth
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 provided with the exception of North
America
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, Europe, and rich
Asia
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 Pacific. Regarding the vicinities with more
wealth
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 than
population
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, North
America
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 was dominant with approximately 34% and seven times discrepancy to its residents. Europe came in a close second with a
wealth
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 constituting 30% and the
population
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 is half its
wealth
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. Followed by the rich
Asia
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 Pacific side comprising just under one-quarter of
wealth
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 and five times less
population
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.
In contrast
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, the regions where its citizens exceed the nation's treasure are China, India, Africa, Latin
America
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, the Caribbean and other parts of
Asia
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 Pacific with a figure of under 5%
wealth
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 in each of the mentioned countries, and in descending order, China, India, other parts of
Asia
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 Pacific, Latin
America
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 and Caribbean, and Africa have a significant gap in
population
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 compared to
wealth
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 with a
population
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 rate of about 23%, 60%, 17%, 10%, and 8% respectively.

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