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The line graph illustrates the amount of spreads consumed from 1981 to 2007, in grams. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph illustrates the amount of spreads consumed from 1981 to 2007, in grams. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The graph illustrates the consumption rate of three spreads,
margarine
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, low-fat and reduced spreads, and
butter
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, from 1981 to 2007. It is mentioned that
margarine
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 and
butter
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 are used earlier than low-fat and reduced spreads. At the start of the period
butter
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 was the most famous product, which was replaced by
margarine
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 from 1991 to 2001, and following that low-fat and reduced spreads were the most spreads in the
last
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 years. At the start of the chart, the amount of
butter
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 was 140
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reached
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 the highest point of the period and
margarine
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stay
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stayed
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 at 90
grams
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 in 1981. In 1986 the amount of
butter
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 spread consisted of about 160
grams
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 after 5 years
butter
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 crossed with
margarine
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 which level showed 100
grams
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 in 1991 and year by year
butter
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 lost its state.
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, 90
grams
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 of
margarine
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 was eaten in the first year after which the figure fluctuated slightly and dropped to a low of 40
grams
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 in 2007. The consumption of low-fat and reduced spreads only started in 1996 with 10
grams
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 and was less popular than shortening and
margarine
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 in
this
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 period.
However
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,
this
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 figure reached a high of just over 80
grams
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 during the 5 years.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words margarine, butter, grams with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "illustrates" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reduced" was used 4 times.
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