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The chart shows requests for information at a tourist office in the United Kingdom from January to June.

The chart shows requests for information at a tourist office in the United Kingdom from January to June.
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The line graph depicts the frequency of
people
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 asking for information between
January
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 and June at a UK tourist
office
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. As can be seen from the chart, the
number
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 of
people
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 coming to the
office
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 and using the telephone to ask for info witnessed an upward trend.
However
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, fewer
people
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 communicated through letters to the
office
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 throughout the period. In
January
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, direct request was the least popular type of communication to get info from the tourist
office
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, with only 400
people
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 using
this
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 method.
This
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number
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 had a big rise climbing up to 800
people
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 in March and more than 1800
people
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 reaching the highest position after 4 months. The
number
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 of tourists using the telephone to look for guidance in
January
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 was about 900
people
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.
Consequently
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,
at the end
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 of the period,
this
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number
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 almost doubled to 1600
people
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.
People
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 using letters or email had dropped from 800
people
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 in
January
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 to only half in May and
this
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 trend continued until the end of the period.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, january, office, number with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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