Some people believe that modern technology is increasing the gap between rich and poor, while others disagree and say that it is helping reduce the gap. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

In the contemporary era, perspectives vary regarding the impact of modern technology on the socio-economic gap between affluent and impoverished individuals.
While
some contend that technological advancements are reducing disparities, others argue that they
further
exacerbates
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the divide. From my standpoint, technology tends to escalate the gap between the rich and the poor
due to
various reasons, primarily the unequal access to and utilisation of technology.
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A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • socio-economic status
  • wealth inequality
  • infrastructure
  • tech-enhanced learning
  • automate
  • low-skill jobs
  • digital platforms
  • mobile banking
  • financial services
  • e-commerce
  • democratizing
  • marginalized
  • public-private partnerships
  • digital literacy
  • social entrepreneurs
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