The bar chart below shows the hours per week that teenagers spend doing certain activities in Chester from 2002 to 2007.
The bar chart illustrates how
teenagers
spend their time at the weekend by doing some activities
. Here are all the activities
that we are going to describe in this
report: going to pubs/discos, watching television
, shopping, doing homework, doing sport, watching DVDs and bowling.
The bar chart shows that teenagers
have the lowest interest in bowling but the highest interest in watching television
.
Teenagers
like the most to watch television
moreover
they spent 25 hours
per week
in 2002 and then
in 2007 this
value increased to 35-36 hours
per week
. We can say they spent almost 2 days a week
just watching TV, which that
is not good. Another point worth highlighting is bowling. Teenager’s interest was slowly falling from 4 to 1 hour per Correct pronoun usage
apply
week
.
Additionally
, about other activities
such
as going to pubs/discos and shopping the chart shows that their result also
increased, since 2002 and they spent 17-18 hours
per week
going to pubs/discos and 15 hours
per week
shopping. Other activities
result was felt but not significantly.
In summary, from 2002 to 2007 Change noun form
activity's
activities'
teenagers
wanted more to do nothing by watching television
than do other activities
that required some movement.Submitted by vladkruglovfencer on
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Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words teenagers, activities, television, hours, week with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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