Some people believe that education is important to get jobs while others believe it its experience and skills. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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The essay needs a clearer introduction. Start with a broader context before narrowing down to the specific argument.

supported main points

Expand on your main points and provide more detailed explanations or examples to support them. For instance, you could mention specific jobs where education is crucial and others where experience and skills are more important.

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Ensure that your essay fully covers both sides of the argument. The part explaining the role of experience and skills is missing and needs to be developed.

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Pay attention to spelling and grammatical errors to make your ideas more clearly understood. For example, 'years' instead of 'yaers' and 'occupation' instead of 'appupation'.

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The essay topic is clearly stated, and it's evident what you're going to discuss.

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Your thesis statement is concise and sets up the discussion well.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

2 paragraphs

80 words

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