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There are people who suffer from poverty in every country. What do you think the reasons for poverty are in your country and what do you think can be done to help these impoverished people?

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The inequality of resources between
poor
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the poor
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 and
rich
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the rich
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 is becoming
the
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a
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 major issue
of
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in
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 many nations.There are
number
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a number
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 of causes,
such
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 as economic disparities,unemployment and lack of
healthfacilities
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health facilities
.A lot of measures can be
done
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taken
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too
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to
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over come
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overcome
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this
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 issue,
that
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 will be discussed in the following
pagagraphs
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paragraphs
.
Firstly
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,the gap between the poor and rich
population
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populations
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 is increasing day by day because of the economic disparities.Wealth is concentrated in the hands of
few
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a few
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,leaving many with insufficient resources.
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,high levels of unemployment or underemployment mean that many individuals do not have a steady income.
This
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 is often
due to
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a laack
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laack
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lack
 of available jobs or mismatches between
workers
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workers'
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 skills and requirements.
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 ,
accesss
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access
 to quality education is often limited to those who can afford it ,which
creats
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creates
the
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a
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 cycle where the impoverished lack the skills needed for higher-paying jobs.
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,poor access to
health
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 care facilities
have
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has
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a demaging
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demaging
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damaging
 impact on the economy.
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,
miserable
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the miserable
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health
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 conditions of
public
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the public
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affects
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 the regular income .
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 ,there are list of measures that can be improved to maintain a balance between communities,
such
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 as improving
health
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 facilities and education would be the major
target
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targets
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.
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,equal education and subsidies on
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the lietracy
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lietracy
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literacy
literary
 system can polish the intellectual abilities of those students who belong to poor families and have
euqal
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equal
 chances to work in multinational companies ,which improve living standards
as well as
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overall
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the overall
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health
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 of
nation
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the nation
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.
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,enhancing the transport system makes easy access for rural
population
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populations
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 to urban areas for commuting.
Government
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The government
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 needs to introduce
walfare
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welfare
 policies,that help to collect data from
romote
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remote
 areas and create job
oppertunities
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opportunities
 for them
accordingly
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.
To conclude
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,every nation
have
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huge
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 impact of differences that are mainly
due to
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 ignorance of
policy making
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policy-making
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 authorities ,
while
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this
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 can be controlled by developing poor-friendly
walfares
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welfares
welfare
,that gather data
of
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on
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 impaired areas and take
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a step
the step
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step
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steps
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 for their betterment.

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relevant specific examples
While the essay identifies several causes of poverty, it could benefit from more detailed examples and explanations. Improving the specificity and relevance of examples could make arguments more compelling.
relevant specific examples
There are several grammatical mistakes and spelling errors, such as 'lieterracy' instead of 'literacy' and 'walfares' instead of 'welfare'. Pay attention to these details to improve accuracy.
clear comprehensive ideas
Some sentences appear lengthy and complex, which may obscure the main points. Consider breaking them down into simpler sentences to improve clarity and readability.
complete response
The essay covers a broad range of potential causes of poverty, demonstrating a good understanding of the topic.
introduction conclusion present
The introduction and conclusion are generally well-structured and provide a clear overview of the arguments presented.

Your opinion

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Economic Disparities
  • Unemployment
  • Underemployment
  • Education Inequality
  • Healthcare Inequality
  • Financial Instability
  • Cost of Living
  • Social Welfare Programs
  • Government Policy
  • Geographic Disparities
  • Development
  • Infrastructure
  • Steady Income
  • Basic Needs
  • Cycle of Poverty
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