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Band 3.5

Inmany countries, more and more people choose to buy imported food rather than food produced locally. Why people buy imported food? What could be done to encourage people to buy local food?

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In an ever-progressive society, imported
food
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take
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takes
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 precedence over local
food
due to
 the high
standards
 is a serious discussion point.
However
,
this
 can be tackled by advertising local
products
. It
is believes
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is believed
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 that
food
which
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apply
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imported from another country
is carefully chose
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is carefully chosen
is carefully choosing
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while
 local
food
 does not go through any censorship.
This
 is caused
the
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by the
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 huge disparity between the imported and local
food
guality
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quality
.
For example
, Envy apples are selected one by one to
guarantees
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 the taste and appearance
whereas
apple
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apples
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 in Vietnam
usually
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are usually
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sale
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sold
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 as a mixture of fresh and overripe ones.
As a result
, people tend to buy
food
 from
other country
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another country
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 in order to ensure the
standards
,
therefore
, it is easy to understand why customers prefer imported
products
than
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to
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 the ones produced locally. The high consumption
in
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of
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 other nations'
food
 is a complex issue but can be dealt with by propaganda
local
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of local
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products
. To
clarlify
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clarify
, nowadays, there are numerous brands of fruit in Vietnam that control the
standards
 very well, by posting it more on
billboard
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billboards
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, newspapers and advertisements on television these brands may be known by users.
Thus
, advertisements can raise the reputation of
products
 and
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increase
incease
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decrease
 the use of local
products
 In conclusion, the high
standards
 quality is the reason cause the priority of imported
food
 and can be
reslove
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resolved
resolve
 by advertising local
food
.
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task response
The essay addresses the task adequately, but the arguments could be developed further for deeper insights. Try to expand on your points with more detailed explanations and examples.
coherence cohesion
There are some issues with sentence structure, grammar, and vocabulary. Simplifying complex statements and ensuring grammatical accuracy would improve readability. For instance, instead of 'this can be tackled by advertising local products,' you could write 'this issue can be addressed by promoting local products.'
coherence cohesion
The essay generally maintains a clear structure, with a recognizable introduction, body, and conclusion. This helps the reader follow your ideas.
task response
The essay provides relevant examples such as the comparison between Envy apples and Vietnamese apples. These examples help illustrate your points more clearly.

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    • Sentence 2 - Example
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