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the diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 year ago and how it looks now. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

the diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 year ago and how it looks now. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
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The
diagaram
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diagram
 shows
layout
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the layout
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 of the Central
Library
 from 20 years ago compared to the current condition. Generally, the
library
 has more facilities now, compared to two decades ago,
along with
 several technology
installments
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instalments
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. Back
then
, the
library
 had two big round tables
along with
 several chairs right at the heart of the
library
 and 3 rooms on the corners.
Overall
, the area was divided into six sections which
was
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 sorted by category. Any information was provided from
enquiry
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the enquiry
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 desk on the right side of the entrance.
Children
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Children's
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 book was placed on the upper right corner of the map and
reading
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the reading
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room
 was on the diagonal opposite. Central
library
 today has four rooms now and three of them
is
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are
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 used for the additional facilities which are computer
room
, cafe and lecturer
room
. Most of the
book
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books
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placed
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were placed
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 within the same area, except for
children's
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the children's
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 section
that
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which
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 moved to the upper left corner of the map where it used to be
CD
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the CD
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 and
videos
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video
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room
. It has removed the tables and chairs from the
center
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centre
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. but add some sofa on children's
room
.
The
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They
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also
 have computers and even self-service machines near
information
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the information
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 desk.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "along with".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words library, room with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "tables" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 2 times.
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