Some countries have legal ages at which people can drink. Other countries believe not having strict laws is a better policy. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.

Numerous nations have a law and obligation that regulates about specific

beverages

,

however

, some nations think by not having a strict regulations is a good

regulation

. In my opinion, a nation does not need to

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a strong policy about

these kind

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of

beverages

, but the rules of selling should be managed. To commence,

beverages

which contain

alcohol

have deleterious effects on

human

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body

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as

,

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cancer, heart attack, tumour, and high blood pressure. Not only

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these

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impact, but

also

it causes a decrease in cognitive thinking or critical thinking. Regarding

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problem, many nationalities have legal ages to consume it. Indonesia,

for instance

, is

one

of countries that has strict rule about it;

however

, they do not have

regulation

at chain of distribution or marketing.

Thus

, young generation drink the

beverages

without responsibility and

this

becomes another social problems.

Nevertheless

, in some nationalities,

alcohol

becomes

one

of solutions to get acquintance with others. Some information

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that these customs and local traditions

affecting

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how much amount of liquor

consumed

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in

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their

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daily basis. Take the United States as an illustration,

this

prominent country does not have a strict

regulation

about

alcohol

. Interestingly,

one

of its problems is not affected by

alcohol

,

nonetheless

, it is through drugs.

To sum up

,

one

of

mandatory

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of the nation is to take care of the

citizen

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citizens

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health.

Therefore

, banning or regulating policy about alcoholic

beverages

become paramount. These policies should

provid

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provide

a clear elaboration about rules and

regulation

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regulations

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how

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the stakeholders play.