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The table below shows local catches and imports of fresh fish into Perth, Australia for the years 2004 - 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows local catches and imports of fresh fish into Perth, Australia for the years 2004 - 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table compares the local
fish
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 that were caught and the fresh
fish
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imports
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 in metric
tons
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 in Perth, Australia for a decade, from 2004 until 2014.
Overall
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, it is shown that both two trends fluctuated in that decade.
In addition
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, we can see that the figures for local catches were higher than
imports
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 of fresh
fish
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 every year. To start with, the highest number of local catches was 8136.2 metric
tons
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 in 2008
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 the lowest was 2677.7 in 2004.
On the other hand
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, the highest percentage of
imports
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 of fresh
fish
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 was 1227.3 metric
tons
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 in 2012
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 the lowest was 231.6 in 2005.
Additionally
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, we can observe that in total, metric
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 of local catches and fresh
fish
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imports
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 peaked at 8949 metric
tons
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 in 2009.
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, one year ago, in 2008, the highest difference between local and
imports
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 happened. In that year, local catches reached 8136.2, as I mentioned above, and
imports
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 were 717.8 metric
tons
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.
This
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 significant difference was about 7500 metric
tons
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words fish, imports, tons with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "difference" was used 2 times.
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