Some schools are very strict about their school uniforms and the appearance of their pupils, while other schools have a very relaxed dress code. What are the advantages and disadvantages of children of having a school uniform?

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Some

schools

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make it compulsory that

students

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should wear

school

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uniforms

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whereas

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some

schools

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disagree.

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essay will state the merits and demerits of having

school

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dress code imposed on

students

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Advantage

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The advantage

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is equality and representation of the

school

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Disadvantage

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The disadvantage

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is that it is less comfortable for

students

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and it is an extra expenditure.

Main

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pros of strict

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uniform order,

equality

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are equality

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among

students

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and

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are

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able to display the

school

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’s image outside the premises. All

students

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wearing the same uniform will eliminate them from being

treatment

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unfairly, despite coming from a poor

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middle class or

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rich family.

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, in my country, in all

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schools

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schools,

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it is mandatory to wear

uniforms

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and it is evident that

students

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treat one another with respect.

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, another benefit is that

uniforms

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represents

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and

markets

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market

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the

school

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can be used as

promotion

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a promotion

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and drive more attention to the

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. During sports events, if pupils wear

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they

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will be recognized by spectators. Despite the advantages there

some

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disadvantages

such

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uniforms

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are an extra expenditure and it is less comfortable. It costs a lot to buy them and having one uniform isn’t enough so

students

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have to buy a few. As

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stationaries

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are

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getting expensive, money spent on

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could be used for

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Also

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uniforms

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are uncomfortable and

students

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are not able to wear what fits and suits them. In conclusion, justness amongst pupils and representation of the

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can be advantageous it is important to note that it be expensive and unpleasant.

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task achievement

Your essay responds to the task and addresses both the advantages and disadvantages of school uniforms. However, try to give a more comprehensive discussion and develop each point in more detail.

coherence cohesion

While your main ideas are logically structured, work on creating a smoother transition between your ideas and paragraphs. This will make your essay flow more naturally.

coherence cohesion

Ensure that each paragraph has a clear central idea and each point is well-supported with examples. This will help bolster your arguments.

coherence cohesion

You have a clear introduction and conclusion which is good for summarizing your stance and giving your essay a neat ending.

task achievement

You used relevant examples to support your points, such as the example about uniforms in your country promoting equality.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

firstly
secondly
thirdly
in additional
moreover
also
for example
for instance
therefore
however
although
even though
despite

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

256 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

peer pressure
bullying
socio-economic differences
school spirit
unity
discipline
belonging
self-expression
individuality
personal development
fashion-related distractions
academic performance
morning routine
comfort
financial burden
cultural differences
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

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Some people think painting and drawings are important as other subjects. They should be compulsory in high school education. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

107.Some say that music is a good way of bringing people from different cultures and ages together. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Some people feel that governments should take a large proportion of people' salaries to pay for public services such as roads and schools. Other thinks high taxes are bad. Discuss both views and give your opinion.