Some schools are very strict about their school uniforms and the appearance of their pupils, while other schools have a very relaxed dress code. What are the advantages and disadvantages of children of having a school uniform?
Some
schools
make it compulsory that students
should wear school
uniforms
whereas
some schools
disagree. This
essay will state the merits and demerits of having school
dress code imposed on students
. Advantage
is equality and representation of the Add an article
The advantage
school
. Disadvantage
is that it is less comfortable for Add an article
The disadvantage
A disadvantage
students
and it is an extra expenditure.
Main
pros of strict Correct article usage
The main
school
uniform order, equality
among Add a missing verb
are equality
students
and students
are
able to display the Wrong verb form
being
school
’s image outside the premises. All students
wearing the same uniform will eliminate them from being treatment
unfairly, despite coming from a poor Replace the word
treated
or
middle class or Correct word choice
apply
a
rich family. Correct article usage
apply
For example
, in my country, in all schools
it is mandatory to wear Add a comma
schools,
uniforms
and it is evident that students
treat one another with respect. Moreover
, another benefit is that uniforms
represents
and Change the verb form
represent
markets
the Correct subject-verb agreement
market
school
. This
can be used as promotion
and drive more attention to the Correct article usage
a promotion
schools
. During sports events, if pupils wear uniforms
it
will be recognized by spectators.
Despite the advantages there Correct pronoun usage
they
some
disadvantages Add a missing verb
are some
such
as,
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apply
uniforms
are an extra expenditure and it is less comfortable. It costs a lot to buy them and having one uniform isn’t enough so students
have to buy a few. As school
stationaries
Correct your spelling
stationery
are
getting expensive, money spent on Correct subject-verb agreement
is
uniforms
could be used for this
. Also
, uniforms
are uncomfortable and students
are not able to wear what fits and suits them.
In conclusion, justness amongst pupils and representation of the school
can be advantageous it is important to note that it be expensive and unpleasant.Submitted by sajeendranrajakumar on
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task achievement
Your essay responds to the task and addresses both the advantages and disadvantages of school uniforms. However, try to give a more comprehensive discussion and develop each point in more detail.
coherence cohesion
While your main ideas are logically structured, work on creating a smoother transition between your ideas and paragraphs. This will make your essay flow more naturally.
coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph has a clear central idea and each point is well-supported with examples. This will help bolster your arguments.
coherence cohesion
You have a clear introduction and conclusion which is good for summarizing your stance and giving your essay a neat ending.
task achievement
You used relevant examples to support your points, such as the example about uniforms in your country promoting equality.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite